If
I could pause in the happenstance
Freeze
midstep, a cryogenic deer
Under
nature’s floodlights
And
scent the moments
That
alter everything
I
would, purposely
Bump
into more people
Dance
until tired
Go
left, not right
Just
for the sharp sweetness
Of
realization soaring
Through
my synapses
And
the sound of Destiny
Pacing restless in
Free Will’s cageThe poems I share on this blog are often old and/or I dislike them. I'd share the few I'm happy with and are current, but then I couldn't submit them to literary magazines.
Some may ask why I share work I find inferior or doesn't represent who I am as a poet in the present. One, I'm unknown and obscurity grants me a perverse freedom. Second, this is like giving you a random tour of my past and what I thought about.
Does that mean you don't like this one? I love the line "scent the moments/that alter everything." It ties in so nicely with the deer in the lines before.
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I've grown to dislike it, honestly. Maybe because it has what I consider false optimism, probably because of how cliche it is.
DeleteWhen I finally give up seeking publication, I'll start posting all the "good stuff" I'm currently sending.
It can be like that, reading your old work. Your standards have gone up, and what once pleased you feels amateurish or hackneyed. I do really like the lines from the first stanza, though.
DeleteThank you. I really do appreciate your words!
DeleteHow goes your writing?
I've been working on a new novel for about a year now. I'm making progress, just not as quickly as I want to. I think I got spoiled by writing three set among the same characters and in the same universe, and am feeling a little frustrated by how long it takes when you're starting from scratch. Hoping to have a complete draft while it's still 2018.
ReplyDeleteI know writers are a superstitious bunch, so I won't ask you what it's about. But, same genre? How far are you with your draft? Are you self-publishing?
DeleteI'm not so superstitious . . .at least not about my writing. I'm trying something new. My day job is teaching middle school Spanish, so I'm trying my hand at YA, hoping to produce something my students can read. It's a near-future dystopia wth elements of romance. I've thought I was "almost done" since June, but the story keeps growing on me. I'm concerned that it's eventually going to be a trilogy. (I was hoping for a single volume story this time). I've haven't made any decisions about publishing yet, wanting to finish the darn thing first.
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